falling, falling

he had the burden of a high potential

everyone expected excellence

he never cared about the differential

he only ever used his common sense

so there you are

prince of the high school

king of the frat boys

owner of life

ain't that your new car?

ain't that your big house

your prized possessions

your kids

your wife

don't look now

don't look down

don't take a good look around

'cause you are falling, falling

and there ain't no getting back up

it's human nature to want more, more, more

up, up, up

higher and higher

no matter how much money you have in store

is never as much as you require

so there you are

it was so much easier

when you were young

when you still held wonder

at the latest drug

and the latest girl's tongue

don't look now

don't look down

don't take a good look around

'cause you are falling, falling

and there ain't no getting back up

Interesting first draft, farmboy. But don't you think "There ain't no getting back up" is kind of, well, rash?

And judgemental and cruel; don't forget those. Ah, man, cut me some slack. It's a fuckin' first draft, you know? I'm just going for raw writing here, something I can work with.

So what I'm saying is: We'll see.